A new life
The sun raised and I found something that felt different
that something was new
a feeling I thought I lost along time ago
as my salty tears fell onto her beautiful dress
but she didn't seem to care.
she held me in her arms that felt so comforting
and I couldn't help but cry
now I undertand why they go to her.
her comfort
her words
even when she doesn't talk she's there
just to be there for anyone
I wish I trusted her the first time we met
Then I wouldn't have been put threw so much pain as I am now.
when the sun had set my pain was gone.
and i felt and ease for once
sleeping in her arms that kept me safe all night long
posted by Angie @ 8/18/2006 08:23:00 AM
2 Comments:
Intriguing
You hint at a lot. While it is not necessary to always make everything to your reader, consider giving us something we can latch on to, like a clue about who "her" is or what caused the pain. Also you start by mentioning the sun and then don't mention it again. This leaves me with an incomplete feeling.
i really liked this line: "the sun raised and i found something that felt different." it's just.. nice.
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